最后提问的是资历最浅的助理教授。他的评价是一句简短的话:“你的研究不错,但写作太差”(“Your dissertation is well researched but poorly written.”)。他接着说:你文中的长句子太多,我无法一一给你修改。事实上,从第22页上的下面这句话之后,我就放弃了替你修改文字的努力—你的论文得重写!
Polishing dental microwear observed on the lingual surfaces of cheek teeth in the Desmostylia and, to a lesser extent, the Sirenia, indicate the abrasive influence of substrate particles between the tongue and the teeth resembling the effect of lingual piston suction feeding of Odobenus rosmarus in the more extreme cases within the Desmostylia.
我将其改成:
Polishing dental microwear on the lingual surfaces of cheek teeth in the Desmostylia and, to a lesser extent, the Sirenia, indicates the abrasion of substrate particles between the tongue and the teeth. This resembles the lingual piston suction feeding of Odobenus rosmarus in the more extreme cases within the Desmostylia.