标题: 第一首英文诗:Sometimes I don't know why [打印本页]
作者: 冰花 时间: 2007-3-2 20:47 标题: 第一首英文诗:Sometimes I don't know why
Sometimes I don't know why
BY ROSE LU (冰花)
Sometimes I don't know why
I just feel so sad
I wish someone could read my mind
Come and stop by my side
Sometimes I don't know why
I just feel so confined
I wish someone could share my feelings
Come and ferry me out of this island
Sometimes I don't know why
I just feel so upset
I wish someone could understand my heart
Come and give me a hand
I hope you are that someone
my sweet dream in the distant land
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第一次TRY英文的, 请大家给改改:
Sometimes I don't know why
BY ROSE LU
Sometimes I don't know why
I just feel so sad
I wish someone could read my mind
Come and stop by my side
Sometimes I don't know why
I just feel so confined
I wish someone could share my feelings
Come and ferry me out of this island
Sometimes I don't know why
I just feel so upset
I wish someone could understand my heart
Come and give me a hand
I hope that you are the someone
my sweet dreamer in the distant land
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作者: 冰花 时间: 2007-3-2 20:51
不知道为什么
冰花 译
不知道为什么
有时我是如此的哀伤
渴望有人解读我的思绪
陪伴在我的身旁
不知道为什么
有时我感到如同被囚
渴望有人懂得我的感觉
渡我出孤岛
不知道为什么
有时我感到是如此的担忧
渴望有人懂得我的心情
把我拯救
多么希望你是那个人
我甜蜜而遥远的梦想
作者: 冰花 时间: 2007-3-2 21:00
很感谢梦文等的鼓励和非马老师的肯定和修改!
引用第17楼非马于02-07-2007 21:48发表的“”:
冰花第一次出手便有这样的成绩，实在令人高兴。
最后两行也许可改成：
I hope you are that someone
my sweet dream in the distant land
作者: 如梦 时间: 2007-3-2 22:51
我们都有这样的梦啊.
可有时,当人真的遇到知音, 又害怕了, 不愿再走近一步. 为什么?
我说的走近, 是指心的距离.
拯救?
作者: 冰花 时间: 2007-3-2 23:12
如梦,
谢谢你啊! 我就没找到"拯"'字!
你帮我大忙啦.
作者: 冰花 时间: 2007-3-2 23:15
为什么?
是不是怕背上沉重的十字架?
内心的渴望和梦想多数还是有的, 爱写作的人就可以化作文字吧!
Originally posted by 如梦 at 2007-3-3 03:51 AM:
我们都有这样的梦啊.
可有时,当人真的遇到知音, 又害怕了, 不愿再走近一步. 为什么?
我说的走近, 是指心的距离.
拯救?
作者: 金凤 时间: 2007-3-3 01:59
冰花在现实和梦想中穿行。
作者: 冰花 时间: 2007-3-3 13:30
哈哈,
上电脑作诗.
下电脑做饭.
如何?
其实我们这些行走在文字上的人都一样, 把文字作为现实和梦想的桥梁, 文字代表我们的思绪穿行在现实和梦想中!
穿行中我们交叉相逢~~~
Originally posted by 金凤 at 2007-3-3 06:59 AM:
冰花在现实和梦想中穿行。
作者: 三川 时间: 2007-3-4 04:44
binghua: Sometimes I don't know why?
tugan: I never know why? 
作者: searain 时间: 2007-3-4 04:54
searain: Better than always ask why me, why...?!
作者: 海外逸士 时间: 2007-3-4 10:35
It's good for a first time writer.
作者: Baihe 时间: 2007-3-4 12:36
梦想也是生活的一部分.
认真梦想, 也是认真生活.
作者: 冰花 时间: 2007-3-4 19:57
哈哈, 现在我不SAD和UPSET 了, BECAUSE 土干 COME BY MYSIDE!
Originally posted by
三川 at 2007-3-4 09:44 AM:
binghua: Sometimes I don't know why?
tugan: I never know why?
作者: 冰花 时间: 2007-3-4 19:59
今天是农历元月十五, 给海雨拜个晚年!
祝你猪年诸事风调雨顺!!
哈哈, "Better than always ask why me, why...?! "
谢谢!
Originally posted by
searain at 2007-3-4 09:54 AM:
searain: Better than always ask why me, why...?!
作者: 冰花 时间: 2007-3-4 20:02
问海外逸士好!
元宵节快乐!
谢谢您的评点和夸奖!
但愿这不是我的最后一首英文诗~~~
Originally posted by 海外逸士 at 2007-3-4 03:35 PM:
It's good for a first time writer.
作者: 冰花 时间: 2007-3-4 20:10
嗯, 百合的话很有哲理啊!
很深刻!
元宵节快乐!
Originally posted by Baihe at 2007-3-4 05:36 PM:
梦想也是生活的一部分.
认真梦想, 也是认真生活.
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