标题: [旧作]Notes from the Crescent City [打印本页] 作者: Susan 时间: 2006-8-31 19:43 标题: [旧作]Notes from the Crescent City
这个是新奥尔良印象。Adagio批评过的，想想改不好，不改了。
Notes from the Crescent City
Under the honey-dipped moon
The city is brewing up a storm
Like a voodoo queen’s pot
Bubbling with excitement
With anticipation
I am but one of the ingredients
A sacrificed fish, suffocated
Gasping for the moist air
All things are mixed together
Milk chocolate skins and cellulite-free bodies mixed
With tourists’ pale paunches
Proud flags of Star - Spangled Banner mixed
With proud flags of rainbow
Smells of sweats and perfumes
Cigarettes and weeds
Garbage and sewage
All mixed up together
In this giant bowl of Gumbo作者: July 时间: 2006-8-31 20:15 I like last two verses best )作者: 况也 时间: 2006-8-31 21:52 "Under the honey-dipped moon
The city is brewing up a storm
Like a voodoo queen’s pot
Bubbling with excitement
With anticipation"
like that, can feel the tension...作者: adagio 时间: 2006-8-31 22:00
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Originally posted by Susan at 2006-9-1 12:43 AM:
这个是新奥尔良印象。Adagio批评过的，想想改不好，不改了。
did I? oh boy, can't even remember. read again and feel it's not glued together as a whole piece. maybe I felt same thing earlier. Like your Chicago very much though, IMO it's your best poem.
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